Conversion Killer

Your demo request form is broken

[FirstName],

Quick heads up—your demo form at [SpecificURL] has a [SpecificIssue].

I tried filling it out (doing research on [Industry] companies) and [WhatWentWrong]. If I couldn't complete it, you're losing [EstimatedPercentage]% of potential leads.

Also noticed:
- No confirmation message
- No mobile optimization
- Asking for [UnnecessaryField] up front (kills conversion)

[ClientExample] had a similar form setup. We rebuilt it and their form completion rate went from [OldRate]% to [NewRate]%.

Want me to send over the before/after? Takes 3 minutes to show you.